Sunday, January 04, 2009

Poem by Jerilyn


The heaviness
of a December ice storm
stumped a large pear tree
for shoots
from roots
and weeds
sticking out of the ground
like victory flags.

Shiny sharp loppers
held captive
in hands determined
not to surrender
whack furiously through
green and brown overgrowth
woven together
like a primitive tapestry.

Time stands still
or rather
moves forward
and backward
in one motion,
as green gloved fingers
gather the fresh cuttings
sifting through old dirt
the dust of ancestors
left to feed
weeds and pear trees.

1 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

Hi Alex,

I'm not sure if this is a typo or if I wrote it this way...but I think the fourth line should say "leaving shoots from roots" instead of "for shoots from roots"...the "for" should be "leaving". It doesn't make much sense with "for"...when I was sitting on the pear tree stump, "for" may have made sense, but I don't think it does now.

Additionally, where it says "green gloved fingers gather the fresh cuttings" the "the" shouldn't be there. It may have been there in the original version, but I like it better without it.

Not that it really matters, but will you change it please?

Thanks,
J

9:18 PM  

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